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November 30, 2007

My Pitch

so... tell me what you think. I have 2 minutes. It's supposed to pique your interest enough to make you want to ask questions. Does it do this?

Remember back for a moment, back to elementary school. Think back to the kid who wasn’t cool. Maybe it was you. Maybe it was the kid you ignored. But he was there. He was the one that peed his pants during music class, cried during recess, couldn’t catch the football during the big game.

Now imagine he goes home, and things don’t get any better.

A Well-Adjusted Boy is a drama about intellectually precocious 12 year old Laurent Winters, the son and primary test subject of a prominent child rearing expert, his mother Dr Jean Winters.

On one hand, he exists in a structured, emotionally barren world at home (His mother will only hug him for 5 seconds at the most, it’s timed on an egg timer, and only as a reward for good behavior.) And on the other hand, he barely survives in this chaotic lord of the flies 6th grade existence at school (Where he is, by his own admission, “not high on the social hierarchy.”)

This delicate balance is overwhelmed when he’s traumatically shamed at school, and finds no comfort from his mother at home, at this time when he really needs it. Laurent loses his carefully groomed, well-behaved disposition and makes a decision he knows his mother wouldn’t approve of. .. Because he needs to change.

With the help of his new – and only – friend, a free-spirited 12 year old girl named Talayah, he sets out on a quest to find the Right Reverend Cornelius, the famous Texas Televangelist... the only one who can turn his cold, distant mother into

the loving parent he’s always needed. Of course, as with any journey, they find much more.

Posted by jason on November 30, 2007 07:04 PM

Comments

I honestly think it does prompt the need to find out more. but when I hear there is a televangelist in the movie i automatically assume the drama has become a comedy. has it? is it both... just curious.

Posted by: mindy on November 30, 2007 09:24 PM

I think it sounds really interesting -- like a story of self discovery that all can relate to in their own ways. I imagine that the Televangelist has some elements of comedy but that doesn't make it a comedy -- and kind of a supernatural way for the boy to deal with his own reality of pain and suffocation-- is that true?

Posted by: Jonathan Latshaw on December 1, 2007 01:04 PM

Well, I guess it does an alright job of creating questions to ask, that's good. It is a drama, but it definitely has many funny parts. Think garden state or a movie like that for tone. The Televangelist actually isn't part of the comedy though, his part in the story is my "Big Gloom," when the goals of both the children get dashed and they think the worst possible thing has happened.

In their child-like ways, they see the Televangelist on the television where he promises a deeper love, a deeper intimacy than they thought was possible, but that they always knew they needed... and Laurent thinks, this is the guy that can magically change my mom. So it is kind of funny but sad at the same time that this is his big plan for change, but then you also hope... maybe this crazy thing COULD work out.

The televangelist is connect to Talayah too, somehow, in a way that really hurts her when they finally meet up.

Posted by: jason on December 1, 2007 01:09 PM

Yeah thats what I was thinking. That is a theme that people can relate to certainly. I think it sounds really good and also a good character movie where you really fall in love with the kids.


Posted by: Jonathan Latshaw on December 1, 2007 10:47 PM

are still going to pursue the televangelist in hopes of healing the girl's mother?

Posted by: sean on December 4, 2007 05:25 PM

that part of the story has changee. it was bogging down the story too much both at the beginning and the end to have his quest be about saving Talayah's mom.... First you had to spend too much time with her upfront so you cared that she was dying. (And that you saw why Laurent would care so much that she was dying). And then at the end of the story, with her dead, it was confusing on where Talayah should end up. An orphanage? Not happy at all. With Laurent and his mom? Too movie of the week.

I decided to streamline it and tell the story solely about the children. So the quest is because they both need things, not so much what someone else needs. Talayah needs to find her dad (the televangelist is her father, she knows that from a young age, she's never met him) and Laurent needs to have a mom who loves him. This makes more sense and is more rrelattable. Everyone knows what it is to need a mother's love... not everyone knows what it is to want to save the mother of a new friend from a disease. For me it makes it more personal and intimate for Laurent right away.

Posted by: jason on December 5, 2007 03:23 AM

i think you made a wise decision, particularly for a movie. if, perhaps, you were writing a novel, then you have the luxury of time to build the original story. either way though, i prefer the new, streamlined version...well done.

Posted by: sean on December 5, 2007 06:19 PM

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